Criticisms of ‘Based Brief’

  Dennis Hackethal commented on idea #724.

There are a bunch of things that start with Zu, such as ZuBerlin, ZuThailand, etc. I suppose that too could've been explained clearer

#724·Dirk Meulenbelt, about 1 year ago

I see. It’s the hyphen being followed by a space that threw me off. Did you get that from Dutch? I know German has it, too, but I don’t think English does. ‘Zu series’ might work.

  Dennis Hackethal criticized idea #717.

I didn't know that. I figured linking to the tweet that posted it would be fine.

#717·Dirk Meulenbelt, about 1 year ago

Providing the source doesn’t fix the (potential) copyright violation, if that’s what you’re suggesting.

  Dennis Hackethal commented on idea #716.

How could I explain a term in the headline?

#716·Dirk Meulenbelt, about 1 year ago

‘Honduran Supreme Court declares zones for employment and economic development (ZEDEs) unconstitutional’

  Dirk Meulenbelt commented on criticism #710.

In the coming period, expect us to pick up on many of the talks’ subject matter.

False possessive

#710·Dennis HackethalOP, about 1 year ago

Interesting. I recall this felt 'off'. I keep learning grammar details after 20 years of knowing English.

  Dirk Meulenbelt commented on criticism #714.

We will update you on news, events, and do longer form write-ups […]

‘longer-form’

[…] on the projects discussed in the talks, […]

You mentioned the talks in the previous sentence. Remove “discussed in the talks” and instead say ‘discussed projects’ or ‘projects that were discussed’.

[…] as we now have many more news sources we didn’t yet know about.

Don’t explain yourself to your readers. Remove this part.

#714·Dennis HackethalOP revised about 1 year ago

agreed

  Dirk Meulenbelt commented on criticism #709.

Zu- series of popup projects

That hyphen looks out of place.

#709·Dennis HackethalOP, about 1 year ago

There are a bunch of things that start with Zu, such as ZuBerlin, ZuThailand, etc. I suppose that too could've been explained clearer

  Dirk Meulenbelt commented on criticism #708.

The Honduran Supreme Court still needs to publish an explanatory addendum on the passed law to explain how (existing) ZEDEs will be dealt with after this ruling.

Passive voice hides accountability. Who will deal with ZEDEs? Use active voice accordingly.

#708·Dennis HackethalOP, about 1 year ago

Agreed

  Dirk Meulenbelt commented on criticism #707.

Prospects for Próspera and other ZEDEs look dire and in a recent post […]

The alliteration threw me off a bit here. And if they’re dire they’re not really prospects. ‘Outlook’ might work better here.

#707·Dennis HackethalOP, about 1 year ago

Agreed

  Dirk Meulenbelt commented on criticism #706.

lighter taxes and regulations

‘lower taxes and lighter regulations’ (I don’t think taxes can be ‘light’)

#706·Dennis HackethalOP, about 1 year ago

I suppose not

  Dirk Meulenbelt commented on criticism #705.

achieved via allowing

‘by allowing’

#705·Dennis HackethalOP, about 1 year ago

Indeed

  Dirk Meulenbelt commented on criticism #703.

made […] legally possible

Just say ‘legalized’

#703·Dennis HackethalOP revised about 1 year ago

Gotcha

  Dirk Meulenbelt commented on criticism #701.

Related to #700:

ZEDEs are SEZs in Honduras.

What are SEZs?

#701·Dennis HackethalOP, about 1 year ago

I suppose that too warrants an explanation.

  Dirk Meulenbelt commented on criticism #712.

Not a lawyer but reproducing the entire letter from Próspera ZEDE is presumably a violation of their copyright.

#712·Dennis HackethalOP revised about 1 year ago

I didn't know that. I figured linking to the tweet that posted it would be fine.

  Dirk Meulenbelt commented on idea #700.

I now see that the newsletter links to an explanation further down:

ZEDEs are SEZs in Honduras.

But that’s too late. May have already lost readers at that point.

#700·Dennis HackethalOP, about 1 year ago

How could I explain a term in the headline?

  Dennis Hackethal revised criticism #711.

We will update you on news, events, and do longer form write-ups […]

‘longer-form’

[…] on the projects discussed in the talks, […]

You mentioned the talks in the previous sentence. Remove “discussed in the talks” and instead say ‘discussed projects’ or ‘projects that were discussed’.

as we now have many more news sources we didn’t yet know about.

Don’t explain yourself to your readers. Remove this part.

We will update you on news, events, and do longer form write-ups […]

‘longer-form’

[…] on the projects discussed in the talks, […]

You mentioned the talks in the previous sentence. Remove “discussed in the talks” and instead say ‘discussed projects’ or ‘projects that were discussed’.

[…] as we now have many more news sources we didn’t yet know about.

Don’t explain yourself to your readers. Remove this part.

  Dennis Hackethal revised criticism #699.

Not a lawyer but reproducing the entire letter from Próspera Zede is presumably a violation of their copyright.

Not a lawyer but reproducing the entire letter from Próspera ZEDE is presumably a violation of their copyright.

  Dennis Hackethal submitted criticism #711.

We will update you on news, events, and do longer form write-ups […]

‘longer-form’

[…] on the projects discussed in the talks, […]

You mentioned the talks in the previous sentence. Remove “discussed in the talks” and instead say ‘discussed projects’ or ‘projects that were discussed’.

as we now have many more news sources we didn’t yet know about.

Don’t explain yourself to your readers. Remove this part.

  Dennis Hackethal submitted criticism #710.

In the coming period, expect us to pick up on many of the talks’ subject matter.

False possessive

  Dennis Hackethal submitted criticism #709.

Zu- series of popup projects

That hyphen looks out of place.

  Dennis Hackethal submitted criticism #708.

The Honduran Supreme Court still needs to publish an explanatory addendum on the passed law to explain how (existing) ZEDEs will be dealt with after this ruling.

Passive voice hides accountability. Who will deal with ZEDEs? Use active voice accordingly.

  Dennis Hackethal submitted criticism #707.

Prospects for Próspera and other ZEDEs look dire and in a recent post […]

The alliteration threw me off a bit here. And if they’re dire they’re not really prospects. ‘Outlook’ might work better here.

  Dennis Hackethal submitted criticism #706.

lighter taxes and regulations

‘lower taxes and lighter regulations’ (I don’t think taxes can be ‘light’)

  Dennis Hackethal submitted criticism #705.

achieved via allowing

‘by allowing’

  Dennis Hackethal revised idea #702 and marked it as a criticism.

legally possible

made […] legally possible

Just say ‘legalized’

  Dennis Hackethal submitted idea #702.

legally possible