Revisions of #711

Contributors: Dennis Hackethal

We will update you on news, events, and do longer form write-ups […]

‘longer-form’

[…] on the projects discussed in the talks, […]

You mentioned the talks in the previous sentence. Remove “discussed in the talks” and instead say ‘discussed projects’ or ‘projects that were discussed’.

as we now have many more news sources we didn’t yet know about.

Don’t explain yourself to your readers. Remove this part.

Version 1·#711·Dennis Hackethal·about 1 year ago·Criticism
1 comment: #715

We will update you on news, events, and do longer form write-ups […]

‘longer-form’

[…] on the projects discussed in the talks, […]

You mentioned the talks in the previous sentence. Remove “discussed in the talks” and instead say ‘discussed projects’ or ‘projects that were discussed’.

as we now have many more news sources we didn’t yet know about.

Don’t explain yourself to your readers. Remove this part.

We will update you on news, events, and do longer form write-ups […]

‘longer-form’

[…] on the projects discussed in the talks, […]

You mentioned the talks in the previous sentence. Remove “discussed in the talks” and instead say ‘discussed projects’ or ‘projects that were discussed’.

[…] as we now have many more news sources we didn’t yet know about.

Don’t explain yourself to your readers. Remove this part.

Version 2·#714·Dennis Hackethal·about 1 year ago·Criticism
1 comment: #725